AUDIENCE FEEDBACK

After completing my film, I decided to see what my target audience would make of it. My target audience is middle age, middle class women. So I showed it to my mother and her friends. Although most of the feedback was mainly positive, they said that at times that the story line may seem unclear. There is also problems with asking people with less media literacy than say teenagers, because they do not know maybe how the film SHOULD look.

NEW VERSION OF MY SHORT FILM

Here is the new version of my short film - I added music in a sneaky effort to distract from the feedback from the voiceover, and I also used a different version of the voice-over because at one point there was someone shouting. Not good. I also added credits to this version because it completely slipped my mind and decided to use some more new clips featuring the new dog that I had previously forsaken. I will post both a Youtube version and a Vimeo because I find that when I upload on Youtube the quality turns out better. Enjoy!

Untitled from Daisy ConwaY on Vimeo.

LENGTH OF MY FILM

I know that there has been some... controversy over the length of my short film: my film is quite a short film with the new version being around 2 minutes in length, I decided to make my short film extra short because it is much more positive to the storyline: I wanted to keep it quite short and simple, rather than letting it get bogged down with various nuances.

MY EVALUATION

is finished! Here it is in majestic prezi.

A2 MEDIA EVALUATION on Prezi

FIRST FILM DRAFT

So here is the first full draft of my film. If you have any suggestions on how it could be improved they would be appreciated.

Untitled from Daisy ConwaY on Vimeo.

VOICEOVER

I finally decided on what my voiceover is going to be. I have chosen the poem 'Death is Nothing At All', by Henry Scott Holland. I got my dad to read it, acting as the old dog. I used a slightly adapted version of the poem so it fit to my film.

Here is the adapted version I used:

Death is nothing at all

I have only slipped away into the next room

I am I and you are you

Whatever we were to each other

That we are still

Call me by my old familiar name

Speak to me in the easy way you always used

Put no difference into your tone

Laugh as we always laughed

At the little jokes we always enjoyed together

Play, smile, think of me, pray for me

Let my name be ever the household word that it always was

Let it be spoken without effort

Without the ghost of a shadow in it

Life means all that it ever meant

It is the same as it ever was

Why should I be out of mind

Because I am out of sight?

I am waiting for you at an interval

Somewhere very near

Just around the corner

All is well.

SUBSIDIARY TASK:REVIEW

Hello again. So I have also managed to create my film review, which I have based on the film page of local freebie mag, Outline. Which you can see to the left. Here is my film review, to the right.

SUBSIDIARY TASK:POSTER

Is finished! Here it is!

VOICEOVER?

(Don't you think this dog looks like an Osmond? The Osmond family dog.)
To begin with, I decided that my short film was going to have no diegetic sound, and would have a musical piece underlying it (see my post on music here and the music I chose here). However, looking at my raw footage, it definitely needs some kind of voiceover to put some spice in the viewers' lives.

One thing I thought about was maybe having a voiceover from the point of view of either the boy or perhaps even the dog. I figured this may give the film a different depth to that you receive with just footage.

However, I am also considering a poem read throughout my film. Not something too soppy but you know.

RAW FOOTAGE

Hello there. Though I have not quite finished filming and editing, here is some of my raw footage; its basically the bare bones, the vital elements. There is no sound, as there is no diegetic noise throughout my film, and I am yet to add music/voiceover. More on that later.

my raw footage from Daisy ConwaY on Vimeo.